When Metem first speaks about the WoL to Vamp Fatale, he says thus:
"Metem: As indicated by his appellation, Astronis has climbed his way up the ranks without the use of a feral soul."
But in the very next sentence, he says this:
"Metem: Should this upstart rise to become grand champion, they would be able to do as they please with the Arcadion's soul repository. And it seems they intend to release all the souls..."
This introduces confusion about who Metem is talking about. Who is "they" in this sentence? The WoL? Eutrope, her sister, and Black Cat? The WoL and Black Cat? Either there needs to be a sentence describing who "they" are, or "they" needs to be changed to "he/she".
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"Metem: As indicated by his appellation, Astronis has climbed his way up the ranks without the use of a feral soul."
But in the very next sentence, he says this:
"Metem: Should this upstart rise to become grand champion, they would be able to do as they please with the Arcadion's soul repository. And it seems they intend to release all the souls..."
This introduces confusion about who Metem is talking about. Who is "they" in this sentence? The WoL? Eutrope, her sister, and Black Cat? The WoL and Black Cat? Either there needs to be a sentence describing who "they" are, or "they" needs to be changed to "he/she".
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